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I must agree with Inertia - this poem feels bland despite the meaning behind it. Perhaps with a slight elaboration, or with a bit more emotion shining through, this could ...

the glowing, burning, fiery though soon to be stone lava of wakefulness. the glowing, burning, fire, though soon to be stone, lava of wakefulness ...or something like that. because what ...

The first one isn't an haiku by rhythm patterns, and it's also a bit repetitive: Majestic horses ok...that's good. there are horses Stampede if you come near still good - ...

I agree that the situations of your day and you life at this time are pressurizing. These are great insults, but is this actually a poem? It seems as if, ...

This was beautiful. I loved all of this, and could relate almost painstakingly to the last stanza. It moved me a lot, I can feel the speaker's emotions as well ...

No person could sooth me quite right any more, For that someone who could long since passed through my door. Was I such a trifle that he could not stay? ...

A relationship is molded by the first few keystrokes Early games determine life and death and now that I'm so far in I doubt I can become a Jesus for ...

I agree with the above comments. The lines continued to get shorter and forced and awkward as the poem went on, until I came to the point that the ending ...

I had scribbled the date on the pink of my palm and a week later I can still hear your heavy breathing, blowing nervousness into my chest The tension builds ...

“ did you ever notice that the most precious people have raisin hands, scars on their bodies & souls, and nothing to show for it ?” fix the quotations, and ...

Causing devastation, destruction and Death! the exclamation point makes it seem a bit over dramatic. all in all, this poem has a prophet-y and ancient feeling to it, which is ...

You come in on drumbeat Casual in black and gray Forged in darkness, the ring you bear Has a silver inscription, twisting the fine lines Of our friendship into love, ...

This was beautiful - not only can I relate to the speaker, but I am moved by what was said here. Your imagery is beautiful, your words forceful and full ...

I'm glad you messaged me to tell me you changed this. In this new form, I find it ten times more easier to read. If you ever linger over this ...

Okay - I'm a line break fiend, so this sort of irks me. Another thing - Ink. Drips. Down. how about this - "Ink drips down." it's the same effect, ...